Tea Leaf (Poem)

[Seamus]

Tea Leaf ~

Sage advice found on a tea leaf
Ground into it's veins
A message of a world unattainable

From further it comes
Much deeper it goes
A universe unexplainable

Sight unseen, a breath of gold instills
A weightless dream of all white
Burning a reminder of where it is we all dwell

This joyful example of peace
This beautiful constant,
Is just a reminder that where we live is hell.

[Aaeden]

Wow. A fascinating poem indeed! I found the start very mystical and implying vastness outside of the physical realm, which is increased throughout the first three stanzas until the dark downturn at the end. It sort of leaves a sour taste in my mouth, as if the beauty of all this limitless potential just got shunted to the side as I realize the limited awareness I'm limited to in this world. Not that I'm saying that's a bad thing at all.

Very powerful!

[Lady Serpent]

Agreed that the ending is very blunt and strikes one down from the rest of the captivatingly mystical imagery.  Not inherintly a bad thing, though; knowing you, it was likely quite intentional.

Quick fix:  "it's" should gramatically be "its", as "It's" implies a shortened version of "it is".  Certainly rediculous; I make the same error all the time and always believe there should be a way around it.  "It is" is four letters long in any case; it shouldn't even be ALLOWED to be conjuncted in the english language.

Great creation of another world in just a very few sentences.  Me gusta mucho.