WIP

[Methadone]

I'm falling apart inside
I'm falling alone tonight
It feels so wrong to be
what everyone is telling me
I'm here

I can't find my side because no one's their
I can't find my mind, and I don't care
Honestly; just to be fair
I don't feel like I'm breathing air

so
many
days
go
by
where
I
sleep
alone


How can it be that I've never truly seen the sun
Every step I take is the one where I think I'll fall





[seriously a work in progress, give opinion or something? I'm not sure how this works ]

[Lady Serpent]

Set to the right tunes, this could be interesting.  It's a song in progress, oui?

The mood is clearly dismayed, but for the choice of words you've used and style, it doesn't seem cheap or, for lack of a better term, 'emo'.  I look forward to seeing what you end up with.

I feel that 'Honestly, just to be fair' feels a bit like filler and doesn't add to the meaning or the flow of the song, but perhaps it'll work well in tune.  That's the only thing I'd offer up for possible modification.

Cheers,
-Lady Serpent