Feral Nights (new poem written at Feral 2009)

[Wotan]

I wrote this piece at Feral this year while sitting and relaxing on the docks with Hangnail and a couple of other furs.  Not one of my best pieces, but I figured that it captures some of the feelings and imagery that I associate with the Feral experience.

FERAL NIGHTS - by Trevor Patrick (Wotan), September 2009

Feral nights of perfect dark,
Black satin cloth of stars and moon.
Haze on the water, a chill in the air,
And a fellowship that ends too soon.

Here is primal man again,
Huddled at the fire against the cold.
Sharing wisdom and knowledge of words and song,
Stories and spirits from times of old.

Every stone speaks forgotten tales,
Of generations from history's fogs,
Faded plaques are high on walls,
And names carved into logs.

All the toes that touched this sand,
And all the feet that walked these paths.
All the minds that knew these truths,
So many cried, so many laughed.

For we are brothers here, and all are one,
Just as day gives way to night.
We will share this understanding with all who will hear,
For we know this way is right.

[Lady Serpent]

Mm....

Feeling much the same myself lately, I can very strongly relate to this.  It is true that it could use some polishing around flow, mostly in syllable count, but the words are solid and the meaning and feeling are certainly present.  You can feel what you're writing, imagining you're on the pier in the early morning when you read it.

The first and fourth paragraph have the best flow, in my mind.  The syllable counts in the lines are such that they can be read aloud with very little trouble.

Feral nights of perfect dark

And a fellowship that ends too soon.

Here is primal man again

All the minds that knew these truths

For we know this way is right

Powerful words, my friend. 

Also makes one truly want to attend Feral.
Thanks for sharing it.
-Lady Serpent

[Wotan]

Very sincere thanks for the compliments, LadyS. 

  Have you ever thought about submitting artwork for the Feral conbook?

[Lady Serpent]

Actually, I just looked at the info for Feral 2010 this morning, and figured I'd drop Potoroo an email about that.

Thanks for the suggestion. 

[SenSint]

:3 for once I see poetry that's different.... most of the stuff I see recently looks too similar but this is a nie poem

[Wotan]

Thanks for the compliment, Sen.  Glad you liked it.